Monday, October 21, 2013

Queries and Loglines

For the last couple of weeks I've been trying to come up with a better query for TBW. I loathe writing queries, especially queries for fantasy. I've lost track of how many queries I've written for this story.

Like many other blogging writers, I subscribe to Miss Snark's First Victim, and I noticed last week that she was holding another logline critique this week. So, I condensed TBW into a couple of sentences and submitted it. If any of you want to advise me, it'll be up for critique tomorrow as Entry #35.

Working on a logline helped me come up with a new (and hopefully better) query. We'll see.

Do you have any tips on writing queries?


  1. I am so bad at writing queries. I hate it with a passion. So I don't have any tips, and just sympathy.

  2. I hate writing them. And I don't have any tips, I'm sorry to say.
    But I do wish you well!


  3. Sending my query (for evaluation) to writers who haven't read my story helps me. Their feedback helps me understand what's missing and what I need more of. Other than that, I just keep working on it.

    1. Yes, that definitely helps. I did that a few weeks ago, and this week I sent it out to people who have read the story.

  4. Was it the one about the Princess and the sea serpents? If so, I liked the first line, but as others pointed out the last line was too vague. I tend to use the following formula: When... But... If/Unless. So, "When Princess Caryn's people are threatened by raiders and their ghost magic, the princess turns to sea serpents for help. But her efforts are thwarted by (such and such). Unless she can (do such and such), she and her people may find themselves living as slaves...

    Only you know your story, so I'm just guesses about the conflict and the consequences, but I hope you get the idea.

    I actually like writing queries, and usually do so right at the beginning of the writing process. It focuses the mind on the story beautifully. If you want me to take a look at yours, I'd be very glad to.


  5. Thanks, Michael! I'll take you up on that at some point.

    And yes, it was the sea serpent one, and the comments helped.

  6. Thanks for stopping by my Discovery Writer site. That's awesome that you are getting ready to query your book. I definitely agree with some of the comments. I know that we like to save some of the juicy details for later, but I think you need to reveal a little more of the character's intentions. Good Luck!